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Started by DeltaPhalanx at 05-11-2007 9:07 PM. Topic has 10 replies.
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   05-11-2007, 9:07 PM
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Bullet Witch: New Endings

Well as you guys may have guessed from the title this is a Bullet Witch fan fiction, I started writing this about a week and a half ago when I saw the potential for a Bullet Witch story incited by the lack of any explanation of, well, just about everything in the game by the terrible cutscenes and absence of any character development. Thus I started this to do just that in an imaginative and detailed way. So I hope you guys like this little sample of what is to come; I'm open to any and all criticism as I am making this for the fans of Bullet Witch and not for myself, so I want to know what I am doing wrong and what I am doing right so I can make this as appealing to everyone as possible.

Bullet Witch: New Endings

Chapter 1: Avarice

Something was coming near. From the sound of rustling leaves, scraping dirt and the heaving, raspy breath the eyes that greedily stalked the approaching figure determined him to be no threat. In fact, they classified him as a soon to be meal.

It appeared so weak, emaciated and dumb that the crows were tempted to give in to their joy at the sight of such an easy meal, immediately descend on the man and devour his whole being. It moved so heavily and without care that even the most daft of forest creatures would know of this approaching intruder and its weakness. For humans were intruders in this forest. Here only the sanguine crows would dare linger, and here no human dwelt without sacrificing their sanity, or life. So what was he here for?

This question rippled through the minds of every resident of that cursed place. The intruder dragged himself a few more steps before his foot caught on a fallen branch and he stumbled. The man groaned as he struggled to regain his meager posture. And as if the stumble had made him suddenly aware of the many eyes watching him, condemning him, the man lifted his head towards the sky and locked eyes with his dark, inquisitive observers.

The eyes of death groped in blind fury for the throats of the uninvited audience. As if to throttle them so that he may complete his task in privacy.

Suddenly as if a great black spirit from below had seeped through the pores of the earth to infect the sky above, the crows and ravens took flight in a panic. In a frenzy of flapping and cawing they struggled to escape the presence of the stranger. The frightened birds clawed at the air with their feathers, hoisting themselves ever higher into the depressing sky. For they sensed immense evil in him.

Not the kind of evil that would kill a child or devour human flesh, but an evil that would go to any lengths to achieve what it so hungrily lusted for. It was the hunger that scared them; demons were always hungry. And such malevolent hunger could only belong such a thing.

After a few minutes more of stumbling and hampered breathing the walking corpse of a man broke from the tree line and entered a clearing. He reached into his coat, torn and dirty from endless abuse, and retrieved a knife along with a small glass vial. Pressing the sharp metallic tool to his slender, fragile wrist he made a quick slashing motion, and blood quickly escaped his body through the wound. He then held the opening of the vial directly under the bloods path of descent and let the fluid stream into the container, plugging it with a cloth to slow the escape of the precious substance.

Finished with his task of self mutilation he outstretched his arms as if in an offering, holding the vial gingerly between both hands and looked towards the sky. Locking his deadly stare with the clouds in an attempt to pierce them, to gaze upon whatever it was that hid behind their protective barrier, and whispered something indiscernible under his breath.

Then in the last effort he would ever put forth in life, the man gathered all of his remaining strength and side armed the vial towards the middle of the clearing. Upon impacting the earth, the vial shattered, and blood splattered across the ground dying the pale soil a crimson red. In response the earth thirstily drank the bounty, like a dying man in the desert who had just discovered a glass of water.

Almost undetectably at first, the ground started to rumble under the mans feet, and as the vibration increased he started to laugh hysterically at the phenomenon. Half surprised that it had actually worked, and half relieved that he was so close to obtaining victory over the Fates. He would finally have his prize.

Sharp cracking sounds whipped the air as the ground in the middle of the clearing slowly parted to form a spider web of crevices, and then fusing to become a bottomless well. The edge of the hole quickly advanced on the old man. He thought he could feel a warm breeze flowing from the opening, and the air he drew suddenly started to burn his throat and eyes, causing them to water.

As the gyrations increased the man struggled to keep his footing in such a weakened state. Sharp pyres started to emerge from the well walls, interlacing and crashing into each other as they grew. Filling the air with the sound of stone struggling against stone.

Within minutes, stone spikes extended forty feet into the sky, intoxicating the air with their presence. The smell of rotting flesh rolled in like a fog from the mouth of the well, as if the spikes were teeth and the gigantic hole lead not to a floor of earth but a stomach with an appetite for death. This is what the breath of a cannibal must have smelled like.

Now the hole had stopped growing, and the old man stood on the very edge over looking its depths. He could not see the bottom, but thought he could hear something. Were there people down there? There couldn't possibly be anyone down there, but something had to be moaning; In pain?

The groaning voices, grew loader, forming words that pleaded with him. They begged, and commanded him all at once to complete the task he had suffered so much, and come so far to complete. Do it now, And you shall have what you seek. Come oh weak wonderer, take one step further, and join us in paradise.

These voices now took hold of the strangers soul with an iron grasp. It strangled his will to resist thoughts of death, pulling him forward. In response his body slowly raised one foot, and extended it over the edge. A rushing wind; Darkness.

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   05-11-2007, 9:13 PM
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Chapter 2: Awakening

 Solemn and quiet, the midsection of a commercial jet provided the perfect shelter for varying kinds of a deep sea fishes. In the dark benthic depths of the Mediterranean a school of cuttlefish gracefully glided over the metallic surface of the structure, and colorful marine vegetation danced with the current that carried essential food within their grasps. As if wooing the sea itself into continuing its precious flow of life saving energy.

There was also something else dancing with the rocking chair motion of the water, eerily composing itself as just another plant casually waving in the oceanic breeze.

But the narrow width of the fibers, fair texture and abnormal coloring gave way to the first-glance vegetations true identity.

The stunning corpse to which the hair belonged was relatively still, the almost imperceptible movement of the water did little to disturb its composure. The arms raised shoulder level as if embracing the gentle, caressing movement of the sea as its only remaining companion in decomposition. The erosion of clothing revealed a strikingly firm body with cold pale skin.

A small fish swam through the waving protein based material in an attempt to cloak itself against nearby predators. However this technique proved futile, as an invisible assassin descended on the poor creature, and it abruptly ceased to move and began rising towards the roof of the makeshift tomb.

The conditions of the water had suddenly started to rapidly change, too suddenly for any life in the immediate vicinity to escape. Everywhere, in an instant, the lives of peaceful marine creatures were suddenly snuffed out like a lit candle wick squished between wet fingers.

The water around the aircraft began to boil as if an invisible volcanic shaft had just opened up beneath it. The liquid quickly reached flash vaporizing heats. In such grueling new conditions matter, organic and non, began to break down. Chips of metal, chunks of flesh and synthetic fabrics eroded away, rising with the heat waves towards the cooler liquid above.

But oddly the corpse with the beautiful face remained untouched by the sweltering heat. Instead of withering away like a torch to a weed, the corpse seemed to thrive off the lethal phenomenon. The dead lips started to regain some of their color, turning from a pale white to fleshy pink. And the hair began to turn an unreal dark blue, like the sea itself had dyed it to keep her beautiful in death.

Perhaps it was the will of God that a thing that could retain such beauty even as it rotted should be protected and preserved, as a testament to the robustness of what he had so ingeniously created.

As the environment dissolved around the corpse and the planes roof finally gave way, the thin strap of fabric holding the victim in her seat boiled away and the body was free of its restraints. The perfectly preserved woman was then abducted by the ascending warm water and carried upwards.

When the first rays of the light the body had seen in three years struck the woman's hair, it appeared as though a plankton bloom had suddenly taken place directly behind its head. Rays of bluish green light danced behind her, like a robe worn by ancient royalty would be gently blown by the soft breeze of Spring.

The ghostly pale face breached the surface of calm waters, illuminated by the silver light of a full moon; and gasped a lungful of salty air.

In the distance the soft humming of an engine could be heard slowly approaching, and in moments the sound of waves slapping metal could be made out. In response the now semi-conscious woman rotated her head in the direction of the oncoming boat, eyes wide and full of curiosity.

Her inactive brain had not been used for over three years, and she had trouble comprehending what the sound meant. You are safe now, Alicia, an unfamiliar voice hummed to her. "I'm… safe," she responded. Slowly forming the words with her lips as her body moved up and down with the waves.

When the boat came closer, one of the two men it carried was taken by surprise at the site of a body floating in the middle of nowhere and suddenly shouted, "***, stop the boat Creg! There's a lady in the water, over there!" and pointed in its direction. "Christ, she's probably one of them," Creg replied optimistically, causing the engine to roar as he slammed on the reverse to slow the boat.

"What? Why would one of those things be floating out in the middle of the ocean? Besides, I've never seen one that looked so pretty," the unknown commented as they neared the free floating body. "Damn. Hey! Are you alive out there!?" Creg shouted as they came within twenty yards of their target and he cautiously slowed the boat to a crawl.

"I guess not, what a shame. And she's so damn pretty, too. I wonder how the *** she got out here?" He said when the woman did not immediately respond. "Hold up man", said the passenger and stiffened himself, listening intently. "She is alive!" He suddenly shouted hysterically.

Whither out of fear, pain, relief or sadness was unknown. But the woman had began to sob softly, barely alerting the would be rescuers to the fact she was still breathing.

Eager to get the girl out of the chilly water the chubby, whiskered passenger of the boat dived in head first and swam out to her. He hooked one of his muscular arms under hers and towed her back to the watercraft, repeatedly reassuring her that she was going to be alright on the way. She had fallen silent.

Creg reached down and hoisted the soaking young girl into the boat and laid her down on a row of seats. "Well she ain't cold strange enough, but we've gotta get her covered up and in something warm, or she'll definitely freeze," Creg said as his passenger stood on the back deck of the boat and wringed his shirt.

"Jesus, I didn't even realize she was naked until I got up close", the unknown mumbled to himself with rosy cheeks despite the cold. He gave his shirt another twist and water pattered on the metal deck.

The skipper retrieved several blankets from a compartment and piled them on the young girl, tucking the edges under her body and head giving the appearance of a newborn child.

He squatted down next to her, "hey, you okay lady?" Creg sympathetically asked the girl, putting his hand on her shoulder. She twitched in response and the man reflexively retracted his hand. "Uh, I'm gonna get a towel and dry your hair okay? People get colds if they don't dry their hair in cold weather", he chuckled in an attempt to take the awkwardness out of the moment.

"Will you leave her alone? You're prob'ly freaking her out," said the passenger. "Shut up Devin, I'm just trying to help", replied Creg as he retrieved a towel and Devin, satisfied he had gotten all the water he could manage out of his clothes, walked onto the boat and stood over the poor girl. Studying her face in an attempt to guess what she was feeling so that he would know what to say.

But he quickly diverted his gaze, as she noticed him, and they met eyes. They were like two green jewel stones custom fitted for her eyes alone, like a jeweler would custom fit a diamond to the ring.

Their beauty captivated Devin, and he took another glance at her. She was still starring at him through half opened eyelids when Creg threw a towel at his friend, "dry her hair off will ya? I'm going to get this tub moving again. Naked girl or not I want to get as far and as fast away from the crap back there as possible." And the boat lurched forward as he pushed the throttle.

"Amen to that", added Devin as he sat next to the young girl and prepared to start drying her hair. "If you haven't already guessed I'm Devin, and that guy over there is Creg", he told her. But before he put the towel to her hair she weakly shook her head from side to side, as if the rapid recovery from death had some how weakened her too much to put any more effort into the motion.

"Huh, you want to say something?" asked Devin as he smiled, pleased by the apparent improvement in her and bent over putting his ear closer to her mouth.

The young beauty slowly raised her head to his, and whispered in the sweetest voice the human ear had ever had the pleasure of capturing, "kill me… please".

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   05-11-2007, 9:18 PM
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Chapter 3: Witch

Her head fell with a soft pat back to the cushioning blanket underneath her, eyes fully closed. She was asleep, like the action had taken all of her strength to perform. Her newly appointed caretaker, however, was frozen in place. His eyes wide in shock and awe.

He stayed like that long enough for a few drops of water to fall from his peppering hair onto her face, as if God were standing above her in tears over her plea for death.

"What the? She just asked me to… kill her" said Devin, still in shock, "what?" Asked Creg in confusion. "I told you, she just asked me to kill her!" He repeated, "damn, whatever happened to her must have knocked her head a good one", said Creg. Trying to come up with an explanation as to why someone who had just been saved from death would ask to be left to it.

"Maybe she came out here to kill herself, you think?" Devin questioned. Creg sighed, and said, "it's possible with all the *** that's been going on. I hear people all over are starting to kill themselves, just so they don't get killed by those things," he paused. "Remember that Christian group? Four hundred people all at once, freakin' crazy," he added.

"Yea well one thing's for sure, we can't let her kill herself, she's way too hot for that," joked Devin in response, taking some of the seriousness out of the conversation as he finally started rubbing the girls head with the towel he had been holding. "Definitely outclasses any girl I've ever dated," Creg joked back, and the boat continued on its course through the night. Slicing noisily through wave after wave.

In the darkness of an unconscious human mind a soft, sorrowful feminine voice broke the silence. Echoing through nothing; Why am I alive? I died, don't you remember, God? I died. Please take me back, please take me back, please take me back. I don't want this! Take me back!

He can't hear you, Alicia, no one can. Only I can hear you now, so stop your pathetic pleading. You aren't going to die any time soon. You are not in His power anymore. A crude, unnatural voice interrupted.

Why? why can't I die!? The soft voice pleaded with the darkness.

You can die; again, when you have fulfilled your purpose. It replied coldly, as though this was the only logical answer.

Wh- who are you?

My name is of no concern, but I will tell you who I am to you; I am he who gives you power, he who gives you purpose. I am he who is your only friend now; those who were your friends have perished, and those potential will curse you for what you are Alicia. You are alone, and I am he who offers salvation.

What do you mean?

That I can only show you.

In the very instant the voice turned silent indistinguishable images began painfully burning their way through the darkness, it peeled away like ash to reveal a wavering image, like that of a melting film strip depicting a small army of horrible humanoid creatures waltzing down a black, sun drenched asphalt street.

Identical, pleasant looking homes lined either side of the long street, except the ones behind the army of corpses were burning and the street was littered with bodies. The flames sent long pyres of toxic black smoke into the sky, giving the appearance that these things had just passed through the gateway to a horrible alternate reality that was now visible to the human eye.

There wasn't any sound, but the woman who's consciousness the images flowed through could tell they were laughing hysterically at something. What they found so hysterical was soon made apparent.

Suddenly the image zoomed out, making visible the innumerable amount of people fleeing from the gross humanoids. Their pursuers decayed smirks were not covered by lips. Pieces were missing from most of their faces and the entirety of their teeth and gums were exposed.

A closer look revealed that their bodies were not all one, they were like patchworks of human flesh. Some had extra faces stitched to their chests and the bodies were horribly emaciated. The skin appeared like it had been stretched, thinned, dried and then sown back on.

Most of the creatures also hefted machine guns and rifles, probably acquired from earlier victims. Suddenly one of the fleshy things pointed at the crowd and shouted something. Instantaneously, and obviously with great pleasure the decaying bodies aimed their weapons at the fleeing crowd and enthusiastically opened fire.

Blood sprayed into the air as lead impacted soft flesh and dead bodies smashed into the concrete. Men, women or children didn't matter to the monsters. They slaughtered anything within range of their bullets, even going so far as to launch grenades at the fleeing mass; causing anonymous body parts to litter the air thirty feet up.

As the party of killing machines proceeded one of them approached a man who, without his left arm or leg, was still managing to move desperately away from the oncoming killers as blood quickly drained from his missing limbs. The seemingly dead soldier that walked up to him firmly placed his foot on the mans back, pinning him. The walking corpse then pressed the barrel of its rifle to the escapee's head and fired.

Brain and skull matter shot forth littering the immediate area, and the lifeless body relaxed. The head falling with a sickening plat as it landed in its own entrails. The killer finished by squishing one of the dead mans eyes that had happened to roll away.

It laughed, and moved on to its next already mutilated victim; a child cowering over his fallen mothers body, his hands covered in their mixed blood - Stop! I don't want to see anymore! Pleaded the witness to the horrible massacre. In response the image violently wavered and dissipated into the nothing. The darkness once again was the only thing to see.

This Alicia, is the world you have been so greedily sucked into after three years of rest, and the one you alone have been charged with liberating. But you will not be completely alone. I will aid you with this task, and when it is done you may return to the realm of death; I promise you.

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   06-05-2007, 7:30 PM
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Well, since nobody else is going to do it, I just wanted to say I thought this was excellent. I can't wait until you release more. :)

"Never futile...but never ending...Indeed, that is the essence of Yevon..."-Auron & Measter Mika
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   06-05-2007, 8:48 PM
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Nice job, I look forward to reading more.


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   06-07-2007, 2:09 AM
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Brilliant bro. Nice job.
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   06-07-2007, 6:46 AM
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Before the trolls stroll though, I'll have to say, good job. Enjoyable.
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   07-20-2007, 10:32 AM
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Seems it's been a while since any one posted here. It's some nice work. Are you still working on it?


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   08-05-2009, 11:28 PM
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nice story so far keep up the nice work.

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   08-24-2009, 3:58 AM
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 LAR CHRIS wrote:

Seems it's been a while since any one posted here. It's some nice work. Are you still working on it?


Yeah, any more work? Eagerly waiting!

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   10-01-2009, 6:13 AM
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Hey guys it's DeltaPhalanx, this is my new account. I can't even describe how astonished I was to see this thread pop back up again after 2 years! I'm sorry to say that I had intended to continue the series and had a lot of additional chapters ready for your viewing pleasure, but my computer decided to crash and the entire thing was lost along with a lot of other good works of mine so it was put on permanent hold. But if any of you play FEAR I'm currently working on a fan fiction for that.
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